Daryl Periman
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Indeed that does help. Many thanks for the clarification. Perhaps I wasn’t as far off the mark as I thought:)
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Should anyone see my first post, they will see that I clearly didn't understand the use of this forum. My apologies, I thought we were submitting these assignments. Not sure how I got that idea except that I teach middle school for a living and am obliged to have students do just that. Just failing forward here.
However, now that I understand the context of this forum I will simply say that extreme nut shelling as in putting a 450 page story into a single line was a fabulous exercise and was grateful for the struggle:)
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Growing up with blood on his hands as a youth, a federal agent returns to his hometown to face a convergence of past and present enemies while keeping his family and friends alive.
Black Sheep One
in New York Write to Pitch "First Pages" - 2022, 2023, 2024
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The attachment includes my first two chapters introducing the protagonist and one of the antagonists as children. Note, many of these scenes were sprinkled as backstory in past iterations, but I found it slowed the pace and some of my betas felt more inclined to want to be in the moment of the two opposing forces in a crucial school shooting scene (rather than backstory).
Though 95% of the book is about the main characters as adults, I felt the reader needed to experience the tragic event in real time with the characters. The school shooting immediately follows these pages.
Many thanks
Daryl
NYPPITCH--PROSE SAMPLE-PERIMAN.gdoc