The Heart Also Whispers: A Rock 'n' Roll Odyssey, Brian C. Lockey in New York Write to Pitch "First Pages" - 2022 and 2023 Posted June 16, 2021 I love the opening paragraph. Beautiful details and I can see it in my mind's eye. I would like more scenery in his room upon waking. However, the contrast between the vivid dream and what's almost black and white of his waking life is interesting. I'm assuming Marie Ticiana is who belongs to Portugal, though she's in Florida? I like the tone and voice of this piece, but the various subordinate and introductory clauses pulled me out of the narrative here and there. Not often, but enough that I should mention it. This may be my own personal preference to keep them minimal. All in all, this was fabulous. I'd love to read more.