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  1. It really was awesome! I hope everyone is doing well. Raising a glass to you all
  2. Thanks, Brady! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Dr. Roth and the monsters also say thank you!
  3. Opening scene - introduction of protagonist, setting, and tone, along with foreshadowing of the primary conflict (the "khrysos ubi vermis" was created by the antagonist, the Umbreytandis, or "King Fetidmire," to free his queen from the Alpha Cells, but of course Dr. Roth doesn't know that yet). Dr. Eugene Roth was the last person to see the Head of Research alive. They stayed late at work on a Friday night in the Alpha Cell Complex, conducting tests on a new prisoner—a treasure-hunting monster composed of precious metals. “You’re one spectacular little fella, aren’t you?” Eugene said, reaching into the experimentation tank and stroking the monster’s golden exoskeleton. “The khrysos ubi vermis is nothing spectacular, Dr. Roth,” said the Head of Research, Dr. Hector Emmanuel. He shined a penlight down the arthropod’s throat, illuminating spongy turquoise tissue. “It’s merely a transformation curse—a product of an intelligent-grade monstrosity with malicious intent, likely from a gobilenus pedigree.” Eugene’s mind whirled with theories and questions, as he sought to understand the purpose and origins of the creature. He feared that failing to prove himself useful might result in being relegated to menial tasks, such as mopping floors and shoveling troll crap. The new prisoner presented a golden opportunity—an opening to rise in the ranks at the Supernatural Research and Defense League and manage a major project. Looking into the monster’s emerald eyes filled him with a mixture of awe and dread. The banding pattern of its abdomen and the white pearl spots on its silver legs suggested it was once a monarch caterpillar, cursed by a goblin right before the pupa stage. The painstaking process of transferring gobilenus will and forging this exoskeleton required self-restraint, patience, and years to complete. The final product’s splendor was indicative of a master's power, leaving Eugene marveling at the sheer craftsmanship and malevolent brilliance. “Mostly we define a monster’s intelligence based on their language capabilities, but is that really the best way, sir?” “I’m not in the mood right now, Dr. Roth.” Joining the league fulfilled a lifelong dream for Eugene, who grew up as an orphan, wrestling with an endless emptiness that fueled his hunger for knowledge and belonging. Impressing Dr. Emmanuel amplified his determination to prove himself worthy of being noticed, respected, and loved like a true son. In recent days, Dr. Emmanuel carried a heavy burden. He lingered in the Alpha Cell Complex late into the night, temper frayed, his once tidy office now cluttered with garbage and unfiled reports; hushed murmurs circulated about him weeping in the supply closet. Weariness etched beneath his eyes, and an unmistakable pall of melancholy covered him like a shadow. Deep concern overwhelmed Eugene; something troubled his mentor—a secret concealed amid the enigmatic creatures of the Alpha Cell Complex, the mysteries of the supernatural intertwining with the complexity of his heart and mind. Eugene’s attention returned to the khrysos ubi vermis. Pincers from slits in its labrum snatched a silver dollar and shoveled it down its gullet. It heaved and regurgitated it covered in mucus. Every valuable item placed in the experimentation tank met the same fate. Eugene timed each one’s disappearance as they fizzled and evaporated beneath mucus coats. “Perhaps we can harvest this chemical,” Eugene said, collecting a sample of the acid mucus. “Our engineers might find some use for it.” “They already do, unfortunately. It’s not an exclusive trait,” Dr. Emmanuel said. “The khrysos ubi vermis employs forchanitric, a corrosive produced in bulk by woodland goblins. It dissolves metals, gemstones, and other precious materials without harming living organisms or releasing noxious fumes.” They needed to explore other avenues to demonstrate the new prisoner's value. If the cost of care outweighed financial gains, the Supreme Commanders of the Supernatural Research and Defense League would compel them to imprison the monster in a coma-tank—a death sentence that preserved the specimen for viewing like a trophy. Eugene was committed to preventing that outcome. “I can't help but feel there's untapped potential within this creature. It's our responsibility to uncover its true capabilities,” Eugene said. “The goblin, or clan of goblins, who created it must have put tremendous effort into their work. We may have a far more dangerous situation on our hands.” Dr. Emmanuel sighed, his weary gaze meeting Eugene’s tenacious eyes. “You've always been eager, perhaps too eager for your own good,” he muttered. “But your passion is admirable, and your logic is cogent, Dr. Roth. Let's explore further, shall we?” The security footage from the Diamond Exchange played on an 80-inch monitor, displaying the chaos caused by the khrysos ubi vermis. With its glittering golden exoskeleton deflecting bullets and its silver legs skittering around the showroom, it vaporized a quarter of a million dollars’ worth of jewelry before HARP officers were able to immobilize and capture it. “A goblin would have loved to possess those jewels. If the intention was to rob the Diamond Exchange, the khrysos ubi vermis failed on every level,” Dr. Emmanuel said, chuckling at the creature’s stupidity. “It triggered the alarms, destroyed everything its master desired, and got itself captured.” “I don’t think its purpose was mere theft, sir. I believe it was performing the task exactly as its master intended—destruction of property, vandalism, chaos. That is its power. Imagine if it swallowed an enchanted heirloom that held a dwarven clan’s collective memory or infiltrated an elven arsenal before a major battle. Think of the devastation it could cause...” Dr. Emmanuel's eyes widened, a mix of apprehension and realization crossing his face. “You might be onto something, kid. We may have underestimated the magnitude of this creature's potential.” “We need to act swiftly and decisively to prevent further harm,” Eugene said. “No, we don’t,” Dr. Emmanuel said, closing the holographic 3D data display, signaling that he had seen enough for the night. Eugene surveyed the main gallery of the Arthropod Wing, marveling at the enchanted vivaria replicating various natural habitats: deserts, tundras, river valleys, and tropical rainforests, complete with weather features. Phinocerous sponoclopsis, magical bees whose hives dripped a wide variety of stimulant drugs for engineers to harvest; camuto homme, giant butterflies with the ability to replay human memories on their wings; and biriti malosisto, cricket monstrosities that stridulated melodies capable of bringing humans to euphoric tears—these creatures were nonlethal and easily manipulated for specific tasks. Behind hobsteel dungeon doors, accessible only to those with higher security clearance, lay the lethal monsters of the Alpha Cell Complex. “Thanks for letting me stay late again, sir,” Eugene said, stepping closer to a hobsteel dungeon door, hoping to see inside. “You've shown dedication and promise, kid. While the khrysos ubi vermis may not be the right fit, I believe it's time for you to explore what lies beyond this gallery. It’s late, but if you're up for it, we can venture into a lethal-level dungeon before we leave.” Entering the dungeon of a lethal monster was a privilege reserved for seasoned lab technicians. With only four months’ experience, Eugene appeared younger than his twenty-eight years, slim from veganism and marathon running. His ear-length dirty blonde hair, usually wild during city clubbing, was now neatly combed behind his ears for serious work. Adrenaline surged through his system, making his palms clammy. This was the moment he had eagerly anticipated—a chance to delve deeper into the Alpha Cell Complex, unveil its mysteries, and leave a lasting impact on the world. “That would be spectacular, sir,” he said, his voice brimming with excitement. “I wish I could restart, kid. I wish I could see the Alpha Cells as novel again, to call this or that thing spectacular as you do.” Face to face, Eugene saw a possible, terrible future reflected in Dr. Emmanuel's tired features—hunched shoulders, a problematic lower back, a wispy cloud of gray hair, heavy bags, grave loneliness. “The truth is,” Eugene said, “I’m nothing without this place.” “Me neither, kid,” Dr. Emmanuel said, patting Eugene’s back with a heavy hand. “Me neither.” Forty stories below ground, the Alpha Cell Complex extended for over 5,000 acres; above lay Goat Head County, what employees referred to as the real world—the world of monotony. Dr. Emmanuel rolled up his sleeves, revealing bracelets adorned with microchips. He placed his head into the eye and facial scanner next to the hobsteel door. “This panel moonlights as a guillotine, ready to decapitate an imposter,” he said. “Let’s hope I don’t blink the wrong way.” A red light flashed above the hobsteel door, and it slid open. The putrid stench of rotting flesh assaulted Eugene as he stepped into the dungeon. # In the middle of the dungeon, a towering vivarium seized Eugene’s attention. Bones entwined gnarled trees that thrived in swampy terrain, creating a haunting spectacle. Dr. Emmanuel beckoned him to a secluded corner, hidden by a billowing black wool curtain. “Stay out of view, kid,” he urgently whispered. The curtain stretched the length of the room, concealing the laboratory's workspace. Dr. Emmanuel retrieved a manila folder from a nearby file cabinet and handed it to Eugene. The first page displayed a photograph of the Lassorecluse—a supernatural arachnid with fifty pearl-white eyes, a scorpion stinger, and legs curving like scythes. Despite the vivarium’s size, the creature—with an abdomen measuring eight by six inches and legs spanning roughly a foot—appeared no larger than a golden retriever. Dr. Emmanuel approached a cage filled with white bunnies and carefully lifted one into the cradle of his arms. He transferred the unsuspecting bunny into a feeding chute, prompting Eugene to peek out from behind the curtain. On the other side of the chute, the bunny landed in the waterlogged terrain of the vivarium, splashing mud onto its pristine white fur. From the upper branches of a cypress tree, the Lassorecluse swiftly launched silken threads; they sliced through the air with alarming speed and snapped like whips, ensnaring the bunny, coiling tightly around its midsection until its bones snapped. The Lassorecluse hoisted the carcass to a branch and injected it with poison from its scorpion tail. The white fur sizzled away, dissolving into pale flesh, while a rash erupted, festering with welts and oozing pus. The pungent stench of decay permeated the air. “This creature inhabited the Goat Head Mountains a few years ago,” Dr. Emmanuel said. “HARP discovered over five hundred different creatures in its cavern, all suspended in web cocoons, decomposing like forgotten relics of a sinister feast. Among the victims, twenty-six were human... twelve were children.” Eugene emerged from the curtain, drawn to the grotesque yet captivating scene. The Lassorecluse had claimed a sixty-foot cypress tree as its morbid domain and decorated the swamp with intricate sculptures built from bones, using its webs as adhesive. One sculpture, on a rock pedestal, was an assemblage resembling Dr. Coffer, the renowned Head of Arthropodal Studies, complete with bulky glasses, dangling earrings, and a lab coat ingeniously crafted from bunny rib cages. “The venom secreted by the stinger triggers a bacterial reaction that preserves the meat like jerky. Though the Lassorecluse requires a meager amount for sustenance, its insatiable appetite for gathering food knows no bounds,” Dr. Emmanuel said. “Driven by primal instincts, it stockpiles for survival. As it stands, there are enough carcasses hanging from these trees to sustain it for over a year.” The creature's white eyes locked onto Eugene. “If we were to introduce a hundred bunnies into the cell, the Lassorecluse would slaughter each one, dismember them, and play a twisted game of Tetris to efficiently arrange the grisly remains around the cypress tree,” Dr. Emmanuel said. The Lassorecluse whipped its web at Eugene, striking the vivarium's glass with crisp intensity, relentlessly attacking and seeking to ensnare him like a helpless bunny. Frustrated by its failed attempts, it leapt into the air and hissed, venomous stinger poised and ready. Violet foam oozed from its stinger, splattering against the glass. When that failed, it crawled back onto a tree branch and gazed at Eugene with its piercing white eyes. Riveted toward the creature by an unseen force, he touched the vivarium. He closed his eyes, attempting to break free from the enchantment, but found himself inexorably moving forward, pressing his cheek and arms against the cold glass. Just as he reached the point of no return, Dr. Emmanuel pulled him back behind the safety of the curtain. The cacophony of the savage lassorecluse—a symphony of poison shots, snapping whips, and furious hisses—reverberated throughout the laboratory. Eugene’s mouth went dry, his nerves jangling. Despite successfully navigating the Supernatural Research and Defense League’s rigorous academic, physical, field, and surveillance tests, he found himself unprepared for the horrors concealed behind the dungeon door. “Why do they keep it alive in a vivarium? What purpose does it serve?” Eugene said, panicking. Dr. Emmanuel opened a nearby cabinet filled with sorcery-shooters and shelves of spell bottles. “We harvest its webs to capture monsters in cocoons. Mark my words, Dr. Roth, these webs come in handy. They immobilize enemies while keeping them alive.” His voice was shaky and weak. “Even colossals find themselves trapped in these unbreakable strands.” As Eugene approached him, Dr. Emmanuel’s lips trembled, as if in agony, and his legs buckled. Eugene caught him by the arm, offering support. “Sir, can you hear me? Are you hurt?” Eugene knelt beside him and checked for a pulse. Dr. Emmanuel's heavy hand slid surreptitiously across Eugene’s chest, depositing an object into the inner pocket of his lab coat. “Trust no one, kid,” he whispered, his breath labored and suffused with whiskey. The weight of Dr. Emmanuel's warning echoed in Eugene’s mind: Trust no one, kid. The spell bottle, containing a lassorecluse web, felt solid and cool in his lab coat pocket—a tangible reminder of conspiracy. The collapse must have been a charade intended to fool the surveillance cameras. With Eugene’s assistance, Dr. Emmanuel pushed himself back onto his feet. “Sorry, Dr. Roth. I didn’t mean to scare you. I suppose I too succumbed to the hypnotic allure of the Lassorecluse,” he said, firmly grasping Eugene’s shoulders and guiding him toward the dungeon’s exit. “Let's depart this wretched place before it takes its toll on our sanity.”
  4. 1. Statement Unite to save Goat Head County from snow elementals and goblin archmagi. 2. In my dark fantasy novel, the central antagonist is a monster known by several names: Umbreytandis, King Fetidmire, and Ulcer. He is a royal goblin archmage and a shapeshifter. Backstory: After losing a war against the elemental kingdoms, he and his wife fled Archlanna through a demon portal, seeking refuge on Earth in a small town near the Teton River in eastern Ohio. In 1976, FoxRunner Wildlife Protection Agency captured his wife and imprisoned her in the Alpha Cell Complex, igniting the King Fetidmire’s unwavering thirst for revenge. The Plot: the king's scheme revolves around freeing his queen and building an army of cursed humans, transforming them into monstrosities—amalgamations of snaking threads with venomous fangs. He wields power over a cast of loyal servants, who are willing to sacrifice themselves to further his goals. After his queen is free, the contagion begins, infecting more and more victims and exponentially expanding his army. All the while, as a shapeshifter, he is posing as a FoxRunner employee, manipulating the very agency tasked with hunting him down. The narrative opens with the murder of Dr. Emmanuel, the escape of Female Fetidmire 1976, and the cursed assault of Alice Parx’s father. Additional antagonists—including Amalgamation X, Princess Nieil of the Tempestas, and General Meyer—collide with the protagonists in a web of conspiracies. Many main characters, while pursuing their own notions of righteousness, hinder and antagonize one another; the novel probes the complex reality of good vs. evil, immersing readers in a world where loyalties and motivations blur. 3. Alpha Cell Complex: Curse of the Fetidmire Foxrunner Wildlife Protection Agency: Chasing the Chiónifey Monsters Among Us 4. My dark fantasy novel, rooted in the real world and imbued with supernatural elements, compares to a range of contemporary works by authors such as Laini Taylor, Sarah J. Maas, Grady Hendrix, and Leigh Bardugo. Much like Laini Taylor's Muse of Nightmares, my novel melds contemporary settings with fantastical elements. Taylor's lyrical prose and rich world-building align with my narrative's lush and immersive storytelling. Both novels explore themes of identity, love, and the intersection between different worlds. Readers who appreciate the emotional depth and fantastical elements in Taylor's work may find my novel captivating. House of Earth and Blood, the first book in Sarah J. Maas's Crescent City series, shares similarities with my novel in its mature themes, complex characters, and intricate world-building. Similarly to my work, Maas delves into personal growth, relationships, and the pursuit of justice amid a backdrop of magic and mystery. Readers who are drawn to the action-packed plots and character-driven narratives in Maas's series might also find my novel engaging. I know the prompt said to "develop two" but I thought it best to add two more, in order to better capture the market for my novel. Audiences that enjoyed Grady Hendrix's How to Sell a Haunted House will also dig my novel, which explores grief as a central theme and infuses elements of horror into the narrative. Additionally, my protagonist, Alice Parx, will resonate with readers who appreciate Leigh Bardugo's protagonists, like the one in Ninth House. Both Alice and Galaxy Stern (from Ninth House) embark on transformative journeys from initial turmoil and soon discover supernatural powers, while delving deeper into a secret organization. In summary, my dark fantasy novel compares to other contemporary works within the dynamic landscape of the larger fantasy market, offering readers a compelling blend of supernatural elements, rich character development, world-building, mystery, horror, and immersive storytelling. 5. Dr. Eugene Roth strives to clear his name after his mentor's murder, plunging into a race against time to expose a conspiracy of goblin shapeshifters and halt the encroaching invasion of cursed monstrosities. Betrayed by her own comrades, Chief Nitta wages a battle to protect her family and unmask a hidden enemy, as her hometown becomes the frontline in a desperate struggle for survival and redemption. Haunted by her brother's suicide, Alice Parx becomes an unlikely savior, transformed by an icy enchantment and battling cursed monstrosities to save the world. 6. Internal conflicts form the core of my novel, shaping the destinies of my protagonists. In this exploration, we'll delve into how inner conflicts and secondary conflicts play out in the lives of Dr. Eugene Roth, Alice Parx, and Chief Shira Nitta, shedding light on the tumultuous journeys that will resonate with readers. The scenarios below are from my novel and not really the hypotheticals the prompt had asked for, since I figured it was better to say how the inner conflicts actually play out in my novel. Dr. Eugene Roth Twenty-eight-year-old Dr. Eugene Roth is a newcomer at the FoxRunner Wildlife Protection Agency, striving to establish his position within an organization predominantly staffed through nepotism. Having grown up as an orphan, he has always yearned for the bonds of family and trust. Many of his colleagues, hailing from esteemed family dynasties within the agency, regard him with skepticism. He often questions the worth of his sacrifices, fearing he may never climb the ladder or gain recognition at FoxRunner His inner turmoil intensifies when Chief Nitta accuses him of murdering Dr. Emmanuel, leading to his confinement in the Alpha Cell Complex, along with the scorn of friends and colleagues alike. Despite these dire circumstances, he persists in his quest to investigate the murder himself. He knows that if he doesn't uncover the truth behind the escaped prisoner, and who masterminded the scheme, humanity itself might be at risk of destruction. Alice Parx Sixteen-year-old Alice Parx's older brother, Miles, committed suicide two months before the events of my novel. She bears a profound burden, haunted by the belief that she could have saved him, tormented by her perceived mistakes. This conflict intensifies when she attempts to save her father from a fetidmire monster's attack in the river valley. The monster speaks to her in Miles's voice, and as its snaking strands part to reveal his face, Alice confronts the harsh reality that her older brother, Miles, has become cursed. Throughout the novel, Miles assumes the role of the fetidmire army's leader and serves as King Ulcer's right-hand man, driven to spread the curse to as many victims as possible. As the plot unfolds, Alice not only battles these creatures but also makes deals with the snow elementals to save her cursed family members. She firmly believes that Miles and her father aren't entirely lost or beyond redemption. Despite Chief Nitta's objections and against seemingly insurmountable odds, she places her trust in the snow elementals and embarks on a quest to find a cure for her loved ones, unable to accept the possibility that they might be lost forever. Chief Shira Nitta Chief Shira Nitta, the Supreme Commander of the FoxRunner Wildlife Protection Agency, grapples with her dual roles. Her responsibilities are unequivocal: protect her agents and uphold the mission to shield the world from supernatural threats. Yet, her unwavering commitment to safeguarding Alice Parx (her daughter's best friend since kindergarten), whom she cherishes like her own family, poses a potential threat to everything she holds dear. Arriving at the scene in the river valley, Chief Nitta discovers that Alice has eluded FoxRunner agents. Worse still, two of their soldiers have perished in a confrontation with the snow elementals. Private Carvel, who also came under attack, alleges that Alice communicated with and aided the snow elementals. FoxRunner protocol calls for Alice to be apprehended and executed. Chief Nitta now stands at a crossroads, torn between her obligations as a leader and her unwavering loyalty to the Parx family. She alters FoxRunner's hunting strategy to protect Alice, potentially jeopardizing the mission and her agents' safety. After the fetidmire monsters massacre her troops on the river valley, she must confront General Meyer, who believes she is the goblin shapeshifter behind the catastrophe. To summarize, these internal conflicts are not just narrative devices; they are the heartbeat of my novel, the driving force behind my characters' actions and choices. Dr. Eugene Roth's quest for recognition, Alice Parx's journey through grief, and Chief Shira Nitta's delicate balancing act between love and duty offer a rich tapestry of human emotions and dilemmas. 7. Langston Heights: The bustling hub of Goat Head County, Langston Heights is a resort that offers ski slopes, cozy cabins, and a sprawling main building with amenities like restaurants, cafes, spas, fitness centers, and indoor pools. Its Grand Ballroom with a stain-glass dome roof serves as a nightclub. Clansdale Township: A charming downtown, dotted with boutique shops, maple syrup specialty stores, ski supply outlets, and other places catering to guests at Langston Heights; suburban neighborhoods where kids ride their bikes and houses go all out, decorating for Christmas. Nice place, except when FoxRunner military men throw sleep grenades through your windows and cart you off for memory manipulation. Lyons Lake: This expansive lake boasts docks with eateries, carnival games, and stalls renting ice skates. Hidden beneath its waters is Chief Shira Nitta's secret laboratory. She has lakefront property, a beautiful mansion with a garden, the perfect place to raise her two daughters; it sure is a bummer when General Meyer obliterates it with a forchanitric war machine. Ramanah Vacation Retreats: A small community of homes for summer rentals. The Parx family lives here year-round (Jerald Parx is the groundskeeper). In winter, the whole place is basically hibernating, the narrow roads dark, icy, and dangerous. Blanket of snow over the pools, tennis courts, soccer field, and basketball court serve as a reminder of the seasonal shutdown. A low fence separates them from the Goat Head Mountain Nature Reserve, federally prohibited land. Goat Head Mountain Nature Reserve: A hotbed of supernatural activity. Central features include the knoll for Parx family picnics, the boulder Alice painted a mural across on Mother’s Day, the ridge where Miles painted landscapes of the river valley, Cauldron Cave, and the frozen waterfall that is actually a demon portal to another world. People are forbidden from entering, under penalty of law, but the Parx family does anyway because freedom to the people and screw the government, am I right? The Alpha Cell Complex: below Langston Heights is a prison for supernatural monsters, run by a secret organization of monster hunters, FoxRunner Wildlife Protection Agency. After passing through security and riding down the elevator, you enter the atrium. Offices for department heads, Chief Nitta, and General Meyer, mess hall, and cubicles for worker bees stem off from here. Then, you have the prison wings. Sort of a museum style, especially because the monsters in the main galleries are meant for display in their glass cases, like trophies. There are six categories of supernatural monster, each with their own wing and main gallery: Elven, Sprite, Goblin, Beast, Serpent, and Arthropod. Each has a unique design and monstrous inhabitants, along with lab equipment for running experiments and throughout each wing are dungeon doors. To access a dungeon door, you need higher level security clearance. The main galleries have peaceful, nonfatal pets, basically; behind those dungeon doors are the vicious collectibles, caught by Master Hunters.
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